Backstory
Yin
Yin grew up in a small plantation village and although she
never had the chance to meet her parents, she was lucky to have one of the best
samurai in the country take her under his wing. As she grew, she was able to
learn and master the art of swordsmanship alongside her master, and her respect
towards him grew exponentially over the years.
To her disappointment, she later finds out that her master is
a dangerous criminal who seeks to gain control of the country. However, she
knows her skill alone will not be enough to defeat her wise and powerful
master. For this reason, she sets on a journey to find a legendary magical
katana that will grant the user the power of the heroes that have held it in
the past.
Kami
Kami is the only daughter of the richest family in town. She
is an overconfident, energetic girl that enjoys passing the time reading tales
of adventures from her parents’ library. These tales inspired in her a passion
for adventure, and so she ran away from home to seek adventures outside of her
palace. Although she is quite new to this new world, she manages to quickly
conquer it.
She has a dark side
to her that is hidden behind her sweet smile. Kami’s bratty nature never fails
to get her into all sorts of trouble. In order to make it by herself in the
streets, she lies and steals from others, and it is through an act of mischief
that she meets Yin, in who she sees the perfect opportunity to have the
adventure she has always wanted.
Attributes:
Yin
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Quiet
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Serious
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Kindhearted
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A recluse
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Skillful
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No social skills
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Analytical
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Thoughtful
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Laid-back
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Just
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Short tempered
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Determined
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Low energy
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Annoying
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Rule breaker
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Sweet
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Mischievous
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Bratty
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Schemer
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Flamboyant
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Dreamer
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Curious
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Energetic
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Excited
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Motivated
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Reckless
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Clumsy
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Playful
Tollbooth Scenario:
As Kami and Yin arrive at the toll booth, Yin is feeling
relieved that she won’t be listening to Kami’s pointless conversations for much
longer. They finally stop and Yin searches through her pockets for change to
pay the toll, however she finds that the money has gone missing. At first she
is puzzled by the disappearance of the money but, after a moment of
realization, she turns to look at Kami, who simply grins back. Yin looks at her
suspiciously, but realizes that if Kami has gotten her hands on the money,
there was no way of getting it back from her. While Yin thinks about what to do
next, Kami pressures her into coming up with a solution for their problem. Soon
after, more cars start lining up behind Yin. The sound of Kami’s ranting and
the cars’ incessant honking eventually become too overwhelming and she yells at
Kami, demanding her to shut up. Kami looks back at her with a daring look, and
proceeds to get off the car. Yin looks at her puzzled and notices that Kami is
leaving her behind. Kami looks back, grins, and waves goodbye to Yin. Yin lets
out a sigh of frustration, rolls her eyes, and puts her head on the wheel, and
comes to the realization that she’d rather not deal with what she considers a
petty problem and decides to turn back and wait for Kami’s return, but not
before apologizing to everyone waiting for her to pay at the tollbooth.
Backstory Yin: Not enough information - why doesn’t she know her parents and why did the Samurai care for her? Did he adopt her? How does this affect her??? What is her life like? It seems odd that a criminal is so caring and that she would turn against them. The potential conflict is interesting, but I don’t believe in these people, yet.
ReplyDeleteBackstory Kami: Need more info!!!! How is it she is able to “quickly conquer” this new world? She seems very unlikable – why do she and Yin connect?
The attribute lists both provide a good start, but could do to be developed.
Tollbooth: Describe what is happening – you are skipping over the details. Make the story come alive for the reader. Get into your character’s head(s)! Not a very clear solution and does not speak clearly about the characters.